Friday, June 28, 2013

Snips And Snails #3

      

          Hi everyone!  Thanks for joining me for another Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday.  I’ve been having a lot of fun sharing from a short story titled Snips and Snails and this week is the third installment.  It’s a short I did a few years ago about fear and what it means in today’s society – kinda.  In case you missed the earlier snippets, jump back on my blog here to check them out.  I did a little cosmetic surgery to the site but still with the same great content and half the calories.  Make sure you check out all the great authors over at SciFiFanSat.blogspot.com and get your weekend fill of science fiction / fantasy.  It’s a regular cornucopia of reading goodness.  Enjoy.  ‘Nuff said. 


          A door slammed closed and footsteps echoed outside as his tormentor approached.  He braced in the corner of the small room as the door flung open.
          Light flooded the chamber, blinding him as he shielded his eyes with his hand.  He saw the anger in his captor’s eyes and wondered if the contempt in his own was that obvious.
          “C’mon, what are you waiting for?  You can’t hide in my closet all night.”
          Lumbering to his feet, the creature wedged through the small door out into a mess of a bedroom.  Discarded toys and handheld video games lay strewn across the room, interspersed between piles of dirty clothing and the smell of, as best he could determine, three day old pizza stuffed under the bed.      

          Grabbing a tuft of hair on the creature’s arm, the young boy pulled the creature towards a desk in the corner.  A computing device used by some humans sat on the table with a giant viewing device mounted directly to the wall.

16 comments:

  1. Definitely a fun twist on monsters in the closet. Love the bedroom description.

    Oh - so much easier to read with the white background!

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    1. Thanks, Carey! I always had a soft spot for this particular scenario and wanted to try a hand at it. I'm anxious to watch it play out and thanks for the site kudos - you know how it is, move one thing then another and pretty soon you've changed the whole room. Striving for my virtual feng shui. Ha.

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  2. This reminds me of Monster Inc. Good stuff. I'm now beginning to wonder who is more afraid, the kid or the creature. I know I would be, if I was the creature. That bedroom sounds downright scary! Love the new look on the site!

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    1. Thanks TK! I know, how do you do the monster in the closet scene w/o thinking Monsters Inc but I think I put a different twist to it. I still have some site tweaking to do but thanks, Carey suggested red on green text.

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  3. I my kids ever found an actual closet monster, I am convinced they'd hold him captive, too. Great twist!

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    1. Ha. That's great and I guess that's kinda where the story is heading - the generational differences between us and our kids. Thanks.

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  4. Who's the monster: the creature or the child? Great stuff!

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    1. I guess it all boils down to perspective, Patrick.

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  5. Define pizza. (jk)... I really like the twist here! Very cool to see through the eyes of the monster!

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    1. Pizza carries the three day rule to reheat - right? Anyone? It was fun writing from the creature's view. Thanks, Star.

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  6. Somehow the monster sounds cornered.

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  7. I don't understand how this person--who would appear to be a child--is controlling a closet monster, but it is awe-inspiring and totally cool. Great details about the room. Humorous tone. Love it.

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  8. Thanks, Jalisa! It should play out in the next few snippets. I'm drawing it out a bit but figured its a short story and I've wanted to share something on SFFSAT in its, mostly, entirety for a while. Glad you're liking it.

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  9. Definitely a great twist on the "Monster in the Closet" concept. I love it! That kid is particularly badass. I look forward to seeing how this plays out.

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  10. Thanks! I have a twist or two left here. Glad you're liking it. Appreciate the comments. as always.

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