Friday, January 18, 2013

Science Fiction Fantasy Snippet


          

          Happy Saturday All!  I’m glad to be back putting out another Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday Snippet.  I continue to be impressed with the quality of work that shows up on this site on a weekly basis by a growing band of fantastic authors.  This week I decided to use a dialogue heavy snippet as opposed to the mostly narrative piece I posted last week.  Just for a little backstory – the prior two snippets I’ve posted for my current WIP have had Sam’s grandfather in the swamps of Louisiana looking for a cauchemar (dead witch) and last week we found Sam crossing an ominous covered bridge on his bike only to wreck and encounter a stranger with, as yet, unexplained intentions.  I backed up a bit with this week’s snippet right before the covered bridge episode.  I hope you enjoy.  Please make sure you check out all the other great snippets offered up over at Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday and if you can take a moment to leave a few words – I know it’s appreciated by all the contributors.

          She called over her shoulder, “Are you coming or what?”
          Sam pressed down on his pedals to catch up before answering, “It’s only another two minutes down the path, Mary, and it’s not like you’re going to invite me inside for a snack.” 
          “You know my parents have like a sixth sense about people in the house when they’re not around.”
          Sam jumped over a small branch with his bike and looked over to make sure Mary was watching.  “You know, you wouldn’t be as freaked out about going home if your parents hadn’t bought like the scariest house in the county.”
          “Yeah, conveniently the real estate agent forgot to mention that, not that my parents would have cared since they don’t believe in ghosts.”
          “What about you?”
          “I wish I didn’t.”
          “What’s that supposed to mean, Mary?”
          “Nothing.”

23 comments:

  1. 'What's that supposed to mean,' indeed! Scary houses, ghosts... what more can you ask for?

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    1. That's what I say! Ha! Thanks for commenting.

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  2. Ooh, it's a ghost story! Not read a good ghost story in forever.

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    1. Ghosts are part of the story but it goes a few different directions. I'm glad you're enjoying where its going here. I'm going to try to use SciFiFan Sat's to keep it moving and update weekly. Thanks, Misa.

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  3. And this is why I love dialogue far more...one can get quite far more information on the characters out of this than the equivalent number of narrative sentences. Great snippet!

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    1. Thanks, T.M. I enjoy writing dialogue more than narrative but I try to throw in some descriptors along the way to rather than simply he said / she saids in the tags. I appreciate you taking the time to comment.

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  4. Love the creepiness factor. Great dialog.

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    1. Thanks JC! I'm excited with how it's developing and I'm looking forward to sharing more and revealing some plot.

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  5. You can read into this snippet to learn a lot about these characters and their history, as well as things to come. Some very nice foreshadowing, S.A.

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    1. Thanks JM! I love to foreshadow. The sixth sense reference was intentional. I'm hoping to take them in some unexpected directions.

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  6. Yikes!! Ghosts!! I love the chemistry between the two characters. Gimme more now... :D

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  7. Ha. These two characters will play off one another for the rest of the story and their relationship grows. Is it next Saturday yet? Totally enjoying sharing these snippets and what an awesome community built here. Maybe we need a SciFiFan Wednesday to tide us over for everyone's work? Two sentence Tuesdays?

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  8. Lovely sense of the camaraderie between the pair here. You write very good dialogue.

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  9. Thanks, Peter. There's a bit of growing history even as young as they are and they're both harbouring their own secrets. Looking forward to playing it out. Appreciate the comments.

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  10. Sound like she's met a few ghosts and regretted it.

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  11. Sue, Mary has some dark secrets of her own. Sam doesn't realize the full extent of his yet. That changes after the bridge. Thanks!

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  12. I want to know what ghost experiences she's had :)

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  13. Tara, then the snippet had done its job. Ha. Thanks for the comments and more to come.

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  14. Oh! A Ghost! Now I want to know what she's seen. :)

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    1. Thanks Ann! Everyone seems to enjoy the ghost tie in. Appreciate the comments.

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  15. Great dialogue. Like the line about the parents having a sixth sense. :)

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  16. Gayle, I was waiting for someone to pick up on that and mention it. . Glad you liked it.

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  17. I'm guessing Mary has good reason to believe in ghosts.

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