Friday, June 1, 2012

Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday Snippet #2


          Hi, all!  This is my second snippet from the same series stemming from my novel  Welcome To GreenGrass.  Last week, I intro’d the main character, John Traveller, who was in the process of saving a newbie who had just been portalled into the strange new city of GreenGrass via a back alley.  In this week’s snippet, Traveller is giving Jerry, the man from the alley, an impromptu break down of the dynamics of his new home as he escorts him to the human quarter of the city.  Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts!  This is a great site and I’m having as much fun reading all the other great snippets as I am submitting my own.  Be sure to check them all out.   

          “There’s a power struggle here between the enchanters and the technologists but Diandelia’s still the main man.  He’s an enchanter that’s said to have been here since the beginning but recently the technologists are making a power play to take control and they keep staking claim to more and more of what used to be run by the magic folk.  See, a lot of the people that wind up here from their home worlds come with some special abilities from whatever race they are, be it magic or some type of extra gift.  Humans, well, most see us as bottom rung because we don’t have anything special to contribute and we’re just taking up space.  Don’t step on the squid kids, Jerry.”  Traveller pointed in front of them.

          Jerry froze in mid step and peered down at four small amoebas slithering out from a shop door.  He cautiously stepped back as a high pitched wail emitted from inside the store.  A much larger squid wearing a red flower on its head stood at the counter and motioned a frantic tentacle toward her small ones, who obediently wriggled back inside, leaving a trail of yellow slime behind them.

          “Oh, I’m sorry… ma’am?” Jerry sheepishly waved an apology.

          Traveller shook his head and moved on. 


21 comments:

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    1. Thanks Heidi. I do like that line and since I'm environmentally conscience, I try to avoid info-dumping.

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  2. Ah humans, taking up space and stepping on people's kids.

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    1. Thanks for the comment Wayne. And join me with my new coalition to stop people from arbitrarily stepping on children. Only you can make a difference.

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  3. Gotta watch those kids getting underfoot!

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    1. I agree Patrick. That's why Wayne and I formed SOKIW (Stepping On Kids Is Wrong). Thanks for the support.

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  4. What Heidi said! Great way to work in an info dump and love the line!

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    1. Thanks JC. I'm glad I got to use it in my snippet. This site is a lot of fun. Glad I joined. Appreciate you taking the time to comment.

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  5. Definitely have to watch your step! Never know what you might crush accidentally. Makes me think of this morning - I hit a squirrel that ran in front of my car (ouchie!). Poor thing. I'm still sad.

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    1. I'm thinking of calling it Godzilla Syndrome. Hey watch out for that pedes....oh, Godzilla. Seriously thanks for taking the time to comment.

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  6. Ahaha!! This is great!! Traveller reminds me of -- for some strange reason -- of Tommy Lee Jones...with a deadpan face and straight-talking monologue, complete with wry remarks. Love it!! Looking forward to seeing more of this!

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    1. Thanks. It's really interesting to see how everyone is perceiving Traveller. I'm glad it seems to be how I hoped to portray him. Tommy Lee Jones - I like it.

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  7. Could be confusing for a newcomer, all right. As far as stepping on kids, I really try to avoid it, but with limited peripheral vision, I literally do not see someone of kid height when looking straight ahead. It's a real problem in grocery stores. (BTW I'm here, at http://jarnianconfederation.wordpress.com/ but I forgot to sign up this week.

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    1. Thanks for commenting, Sue. I really appreciate it. Maybe we could issue blinking light hats until they're twelve or so.

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  8. I agree with Mrs T! Very Men in Black! I want to join SOKIW! We could join forces! My group Treading On Teeny, Tiny Elderly Rabbits In Not Good or TOTTERING would work well with your group to stamp out heavy footedness!!

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    1. Holy heavy soles! It's a match made in heaven. We corner the kid and small fluffy animal market and we'll make a killing! Errrr....I mean our "charities" will. Thanks for the comments.

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  9. It must take all the Traveller's patience dealing with a newbie.

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  10. I love this world. Fresh and humorous, too!

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