Friday, January 10, 2014

Stein #12


And we’re off.  Another Saturday, another selection of science fiction and fantasy snippets over at SciFiFanSat.blogspot.com.  I hope the new year is off to great start for everyone and we’re gearing up for another great year of some awesome reads.  Be sure to go over to the main site and check out all the other posts submitted this week.  My snippet for this week is from my WIP - STEIN, following Annie, freshly having escaped a group of hungry zombies and finding herself in a garbage dumpster with a mysterious savoir who just saved her life. But for how long? I had to do a little squeezing to get the content I wanted this week but I think it still works.  Enjoy!__________________________________________________
          “My god, what happened to you?” She instinctively reached for his face but drew back her hand.

          Pulling the blanket tight around his shoulders, he slid deeper into the shadows.

          “Life.” 

          Annie had seen her share of suffering and deformities since the event, fingers, legs, gaping holes, and innards hanging out, but it looked like some drunk had let loose on this poor soul’s face with a dull scalpel and shaking hands syndrome, if there were such a thing, layering tragedy over pain.

         She reached for his shoulder and asked, “What’s your name?”

          “No name.”

          “C’mon, they have to call you something.” Her hand hung in the air.

          “Call me Stein.” 
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6 comments:

  1. Does the nameless monster know what he is suggesting by his choice of moniker? A lovely build-up to the name with mentions of scalpels and tragedy.

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    1. Thanks, Peter, the name developed after I started writing and I'm not sure where it'll take me yet but I'm having a good time with it.

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  2. But he seems not to be a zombie, which I suspect is the important point at the moment.

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    1. Zombie is such an ugly term, maybe he's something more, or less, or somewhere in between.

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  3. I could see this very clearly--her outstretched hand, and him drawing further into the darkness of shadow. Quite a tightrope of tension. I do love that he's going by Stein, and your description of his face was memorable.

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    1. That's the challenge of the ten sentence snippet, isn't it? Paint a scene in a short space. I think our new friend has one or two more surprises up his sleeve, well, blanket. Thanks, J!

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