Well, it’s officially the first Saturday in
May! With April showers come
May….Science Fiction and Fantasy Snippets!
Don’t believe me? Just go over to
SciFiFanSat.blogspot.com and check out all the great writing happening there
from a score of great authors! This
week, my contribution to the literary bouquet is another short from my WIP –
STEIN. We’ve been following Annie and
Stein from their impromptu introduction back in the alley to the garage where
Annie and her friends are holed up. She
was hoping to ease into the meet and greet between Stein and her fellow
survivors but sometimes fate has a way of fouling things up. If you haven’t been reading, you can check
out all of the STEIN snippets posted here on my page. I listed them on the bottom. Hope you enjoy!______________________________________________________________
Trudy’s
hands were covered in dirt as she wiped her face, smearing mud across her cheek
and chin.
“Mr. Cliff?”
It
only took a second for her to realize that whatever was looming over her wasn’t
who she hoped.
The
figure lumbered towards her and said, “Pretty.”
A gnarled
hand reached for her as she held the sunflower between them like a shield.
“Mr.
Cliff!”
Grabbing
the flower, it snapped the stalk in half and threw it aside, clanging hard against
the nearby fence. Trudy smelled the
blood and rotten flesh as it knocked her to the ground and growled. She kicked at its face as it bit into the
rubber on her shoe, ripping it free from her foot.
Screaming,
Trudy closed her eyes as it grabbed her shoulders, pinning her down.
“No,
no, no, no.”
And then, she felt…nothing. The pressure holding her arms down
disappeared and the awful smell vanished.
Opening one eye, she peaked up at a man in the hood who gripped the
zombie by the back of its neck. Turning,
he heaved the monster forty feet into the air, well over the fence line, and it
crashed down through the windshield of an abandoned truck out in the street.
Whaaaaaaatttttt?!
I bet you didn’t see that one coming.
I tried to turn it a bit with the setup from last week. Let me know what you thought. Comments are always welcome! Thanks for reading and see you in seven!
No, I didn't see that coming - a very neat way to use something we all know to throw us off track and catch us by surprise. Very nicely done!
ReplyDeleteActually, I kinda did see it coming since you said now for a twist in reply to someone last week. I thought, some Stein is going to prove he's valuable/alright to Mr. Cliff by saving Trudy. I just didn't know *how*. I really thought she was going to be a little bit of snack there for a second, though. Like, that you were going to throw a bit of tragedy our way a bit early to unsettle us. Glad you didn't. :) I like this.
ReplyDeleteHoly crap! Talk about arriving in the nick of time. Well done, sir!
ReplyDeleteYeah, I did kind of see it, too. Nice twist on an old tale, though. Good way to set it up for a completely different tack from the expected. I like that you took a potential disaster and turned it into a victory for Stein. Well done!
ReplyDeleteLiterally had me in goosebumps for most of the snippet. Well done, sir.
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