Hi everyone! Thanks for joining me for another Science
Fiction Fantasy Saturday. I’ve been
having a lot of fun sharing from a short story titled Snips and Snails and this week is the third installment. It’s a short I did a few years ago about fear
and what it means in today’s society – kinda.
In case you missed the earlier snippets, jump back on my blog here to
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Enjoy. ‘Nuff said.
A door slammed closed and footsteps
echoed outside as his tormentor approached.
He braced in the corner of the small room as the door flung open.
Light flooded the chamber, blinding him as he shielded his eyes with his
hand. He saw the anger in his captor’s
eyes and wondered if the contempt in his own was that obvious.
“C’mon, what are you waiting
for? You can’t hide in my closet all
night.”
Lumbering to his feet, the creature
wedged through the small door out into a mess of a bedroom. Discarded toys and handheld video games lay
strewn across the room, interspersed between piles of dirty clothing and the
smell of, as best he could determine, three day old pizza stuffed under the bed.
Grabbing a tuft of hair on the creature’s
arm, the young boy pulled the creature towards a desk in the corner. A computing device used by some humans sat on
the table with a giant viewing device mounted directly to the wall.
Definitely a fun twist on monsters in the closet. Love the bedroom description.
ReplyDeleteOh - so much easier to read with the white background!
Thanks, Carey! I always had a soft spot for this particular scenario and wanted to try a hand at it. I'm anxious to watch it play out and thanks for the site kudos - you know how it is, move one thing then another and pretty soon you've changed the whole room. Striving for my virtual feng shui. Ha.
DeleteThis reminds me of Monster Inc. Good stuff. I'm now beginning to wonder who is more afraid, the kid or the creature. I know I would be, if I was the creature. That bedroom sounds downright scary! Love the new look on the site!
ReplyDeleteThanks TK! I know, how do you do the monster in the closet scene w/o thinking Monsters Inc but I think I put a different twist to it. I still have some site tweaking to do but thanks, Carey suggested red on green text.
DeleteI my kids ever found an actual closet monster, I am convinced they'd hold him captive, too. Great twist!
ReplyDeleteHa. That's great and I guess that's kinda where the story is heading - the generational differences between us and our kids. Thanks.
DeleteWho's the monster: the creature or the child? Great stuff!
ReplyDeleteI guess it all boils down to perspective, Patrick.
DeleteDefine pizza. (jk)... I really like the twist here! Very cool to see through the eyes of the monster!
ReplyDeletePizza carries the three day rule to reheat - right? Anyone? It was fun writing from the creature's view. Thanks, Star.
DeleteSomehow the monster sounds cornered.
ReplyDeleteAnd well he should be, Sue.
DeleteI don't understand how this person--who would appear to be a child--is controlling a closet monster, but it is awe-inspiring and totally cool. Great details about the room. Humorous tone. Love it.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jalisa! It should play out in the next few snippets. I'm drawing it out a bit but figured its a short story and I've wanted to share something on SFFSAT in its, mostly, entirety for a while. Glad you're liking it.
ReplyDeleteDefinitely a great twist on the "Monster in the Closet" concept. I love it! That kid is particularly badass. I look forward to seeing how this plays out.
ReplyDeleteThanks! I have a twist or two left here. Glad you're liking it. Appreciate the comments. as always.
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