What? You mean its Saturday again? Man, a week goes by fast but for us here in
the states, we have an extra-long weekend while we celebrate Memorial Day AND
we get a fresh new batch of some great Science Fiction and Fantasy snippets
courtesy of the fantastic authors over at SciFiFanSat.blogspot.com . Does it really get any better than this? This week, finally, I’m bringing my current
scene from my WIP, Myth-In-Law, to a
close as Professor Livingwood finishes up his game of road chicken with a
mysterious on-coming black semi. For
those of you who have enjoyed this section – thanks again for all the
comments. They really mean a lot
throughout the writing process. I think
I’ll be giving this story a rest for a while here but I’ll try to be back next
week with something fresh. Thanks again
and I hope you enjoy and don’t forget to check out all the great writing going
on over at the main blog. Twitter tag -
#SFFSAT.
Maybe it was the stress, probably
some type of pre-death anxiety that warped his perceptions of reality. The Prof wasn’t sure but he watched the
semi’s cab touch the front of his RV and instead of the eruption of metal on
metal, mass times force and the like, the rolling black monolith melded into
the front of his vehicle.
Time slowed and the RV floated above
the heated asphalt on a cloud of air, oblivious to its damaged wheel as the
vehicles intertwined, the two windshields melting together. Open jawed; the Prof stared at the other
driver, his black trench coat flapped in the imaginary breeze as gloved hands
clenched a giant steering wheel. A black
top hat rested on the man’s head, his face swathed in shadows as he turned to
face the professor. His voice filled the
combined cabins, coming from everywhere and yet nowhere, a hollow whisper
filled with pain.
“I’m getting stronger old man.”
The Professor forced his voice to
sound calmer than he felt and asked, “Where’s Sam?”
“Too late….” The ghost voice trailed off as time caught up
to itself and the rest of the tractor trailer sped through the RV in a
disorienting flash.
Interesting perspective, watching the two vehicles mash together. No question. This 'black-coated driver' is a menace to road safety. If I was the Prof, I'd call 911! Fast!
ReplyDeleteYeah, let them know about the ghost tractor trailer and driver and get the Prof thrown in the drunk tank. I guess he could call AAA.
Deletewhoa! Not at all what I expected. You can just imagine that total grip on detail as perception slows and he has the time to really absorb, split-second by split-second, this strange reality. Wonder, horror, disbelief all in slo-mo. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThanks. This scene was a lot of fun. I did a few edits to fit SFFSAT and lost a little rhythm but I'm happy with it. Glad it took a surprising turn.
DeleteCreeeeeeepy! And well done. I like the time-dilation bit too. It keeps pace with the writing, so I don't feel like an awful lot happened in such a short time.
ReplyDeleteThanks Laurel! The Prof had a rough day and its no where close to over. Glad you liked it.
DeleteWhoa, I did like a really creepy Beavis and/or Butt-head laugh when I finished this snippet. Really well written. Totally weird. I loved it. That ghost voice black trench coat wearin' guy freaks me out. I love when characters do that. :)
ReplyDeleteHeh heh heh heh heh. And if I can freak out just one reader then its been a good day. Thanks, J.M. The man in black is just getting warmed up. Appreciate the read.
DeleteWell that was mildly creep-i-fying. It's like the back-story for a really disturbing urban legend.
ReplyDeleteAnd that's cool that you mentioned urban legend since the story revolves around legend and folklore. Glad you liked it. Thanks.
DeleteHow creepy! I got goosebumps reading it. Very well done!
ReplyDeleteHa. I've creeped out two people. Make it an extra good day. It took a while to develop, like over a month, but I enjoy these snippet exercises to pack it when you can and toss what's unneeded. Thanks again.
ReplyDeleteWow, creepy and atmospheric!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Pippa!
DeleteOh, so glad the Prof survives!
ReplyDeleteBut the ghost semi is somewhat disturbing. I wonder what this has to do with Sam's book...
It all plays together in the coming chapters. Sam and grandpa's adventures are just warming up, if only the two could find one another. Hmmmm.
DeleteI like the way you've controlled the pace of this scene. Absolutely brilliant!
ReplyDeleteThanks JC! I wanted to add some creepiness to the story and keep the turns unexpected and this seemed to entertain. Appreciate the comments!!
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