Hi, all! This is my second snippet from the same
series stemming from my novel Welcome To GreenGrass. Last week, I intro’d the main character, John
Traveller, who was in the process of saving a newbie who had just been portalled into the strange new city of
GreenGrass via a back alley. In this
week’s snippet, Traveller is giving Jerry, the man from the alley, an impromptu
break down of the dynamics of his new home as he escorts him to the human
quarter of the city. Thanks for reading
and sharing your thoughts! This is a
great site and I’m having as much fun reading all the other great snippets as I
am submitting my own. Be sure to check
them all out.
“There’s a power struggle
here between the enchanters and the technologists but Diandelia’s still the
main man. He’s an enchanter that’s said
to have been here since the beginning but recently the technologists are making
a power play to take control and they keep staking claim to more and more of
what used to be run by the magic folk.
See, a lot of the people that wind up here from their home worlds come
with some special abilities from whatever race they are, be it magic or some
type of extra gift. Humans, well, most
see us as bottom rung because we don’t have anything special to contribute and
we’re just taking up space. Don’t step
on the squid kids, Jerry.” Traveller
pointed in front of them.
Jerry froze in mid step
and peered down at four small amoebas slithering out from a shop door. He cautiously stepped back as a high pitched
wail emitted from inside the store. A
much larger squid wearing a red flower on its head stood at the counter and motioned
a frantic tentacle toward her small ones, who obediently wriggled back inside,
leaving a trail of yellow slime behind them.
“Oh, I’m sorry… ma’am?” Jerry sheepishly
waved an apology.
Traveller shook his head
and moved on.
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ReplyDeleteThanks Heidi. I do like that line and since I'm environmentally conscience, I try to avoid info-dumping.
DeleteAh humans, taking up space and stepping on people's kids.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the comment Wayne. And join me with my new coalition to stop people from arbitrarily stepping on children. Only you can make a difference.
DeleteGotta watch those kids getting underfoot!
ReplyDeleteI agree Patrick. That's why Wayne and I formed SOKIW (Stepping On Kids Is Wrong). Thanks for the support.
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DeleteWhat Heidi said! Great way to work in an info dump and love the line!
ReplyDeleteThanks JC. I'm glad I got to use it in my snippet. This site is a lot of fun. Glad I joined. Appreciate you taking the time to comment.
DeleteDefinitely have to watch your step! Never know what you might crush accidentally. Makes me think of this morning - I hit a squirrel that ran in front of my car (ouchie!). Poor thing. I'm still sad.
ReplyDeleteI'm thinking of calling it Godzilla Syndrome. Hey watch out for that pedes....oh, Godzilla. Seriously thanks for taking the time to comment.
DeleteAhaha!! This is great!! Traveller reminds me of -- for some strange reason -- of Tommy Lee Jones...with a deadpan face and straight-talking monologue, complete with wry remarks. Love it!! Looking forward to seeing more of this!
ReplyDeleteThanks. It's really interesting to see how everyone is perceiving Traveller. I'm glad it seems to be how I hoped to portray him. Tommy Lee Jones - I like it.
DeleteCould be confusing for a newcomer, all right. As far as stepping on kids, I really try to avoid it, but with limited peripheral vision, I literally do not see someone of kid height when looking straight ahead. It's a real problem in grocery stores. (BTW I'm here, at http://jarnianconfederation.wordpress.com/ but I forgot to sign up this week.
ReplyDeleteThanks for commenting, Sue. I really appreciate it. Maybe we could issue blinking light hats until they're twelve or so.
DeleteInteresting little snippet.
ReplyDeleteThanks
ReplyDeleteI agree with Mrs T! Very Men in Black! I want to join SOKIW! We could join forces! My group Treading On Teeny, Tiny Elderly Rabbits In Not Good or TOTTERING would work well with your group to stamp out heavy footedness!!
ReplyDeleteHoly heavy soles! It's a match made in heaven. We corner the kid and small fluffy animal market and we'll make a killing! Errrr....I mean our "charities" will. Thanks for the comments.
DeleteIt must take all the Traveller's patience dealing with a newbie.
ReplyDeleteI love this world. Fresh and humorous, too!
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