Friday, October 11, 2013

Stein Snippet #3


Bwahahahahaha!  Just needed to get that out of my system.  It is October, you know.  Halloween is just around the corner and even better than that, we’ve just stumbled into yet another Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday.  What is that you ask?  Well, only a group of some truly inspired sci-fi/fantasy writers that contribute weekly snippets of their work.  Don’t believe me?  Go check out the main site at SciFiFanSat.blogspot.com for a complete list.  And what better time to tell a zombie story than the scariest month of the year!!  Quick recap – in the last few snippets, Annie has been on the run from the meat patrol (ravenous zombies) and took a bad turn into a dead end.  With the running dead closing fast, her only hope is jumping into a trash filled dumpster.

          Annie pulled back the lid to the dumpster and threw her leg up onto the ledge to crawl inside.  A hand shot up from inside the darkened container, slamming the top back down.  Annie stumbled away, dropping the tin medical kit she carried under her arm.

          “Mine, go ‘way!”  The voice sounded like someone choking a dog after they just let it drink drain cleaner, low and coarse, more consonants then vowels.

          The first of the zombies crashed into the wall at the mouth of the alley, clinging to the bricked wall with rotted fingers.  One of the arms from his orange jump suit hung empty at its side.  Annie guessed it for a paramedic or E.M.T. that came across the wrong patient.  Their eyes locked on to each other’s in the little light the corridor provided as its eyes glazed over with the hunger.

          “Pretty food.”

          And there you have it.  I'm still working on a title.  Hope you enjoyed and come back next week to see what happens to Annie and the rat pack.  Please, leave a comment before you go.  They’re always appreciated.

13 comments:

  1. Eeek! Annie is in big trouble! I love the description of the voice of the lurker in the dumpster - really evocative. Great snippet!

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    1. Thanks, Peter. I kinda liked that descript myself. Let's hope Annie has something up her sleeve, like maybe an assault rifle.

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  2. Oh, what great descriptive narrative. And being locked out of an escape route when the hordes are coming. Yikes! Love this piece.

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    1. Thanks. I'm having fun with this. Going snippet to snippet is fun. I hope for Annie's sake I don't come down with writer's block.

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  3. Talking zombies--that actually makes them scarier! Pretty food indeed.

    Great snippet, and very relevant to this month :) Bwahahahahaha!

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    1. I figured, why not. And I didn't know you were in the BwaHaHa evil writer's guild - I've never seen you at the meetings. I'll look next week.

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  4. Oh, crap! Is there a ladder nearby? But, wait. Can these zombies climb? Great snippet! Lots of good descriptions in this one.

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    1. They do everything else, why not climb. I think I'll have them tap dance and juggle next week. Maybe Annie can beat them in a high stakes round of Texas Hold'em. Thanks for the comment, Patrick.

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  5. Toss the dumpster lurker out to the zombies?

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    1. Sue! You gave it away!! Remind to stay ahead of you if we're ever running away from a horde of hungry zombies.

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  6. Great snippet...love the last line. I'm also a big fan of comparisons to things that you probably don't know about for sure (choking a dog who drank drain cleaner), but could have a good idea from the description. :-)

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  7. Thanks! I figured I'd try to put a different spin on the genre some. And you're right, I can't say I've ever heard a drain cleaner drinking dog being choked (and hope I never do) but I think it set the tone.

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  8. Run away, run away, Annie! Great descriptive narrative, especially the last line!

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